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There was never any snow where I was living at the time my parents died. I used to spend the mornings with a mug in my hands and my knees wrapped in a blanket, staring out my tiny, smudged window at a dull, frozen wasteland. My father always used to say that snow was the last pure thing on earth. I don’t know why; it fell from the same clouds and sky that the rain did.

My aunt called me the one morning I thought I saw flurries. I stared hard out the window for a few moments, searching for the movement I had seen only a moment before. The ringing trilled persistently behind me. Finally, I stood and stretched, put my mug down on the windowsill and picked up the phone. I got a chill as I touched the handset and crouched absentmindedly for the blanket that had fallen to the floor. “Hello?”

“Tracy?”

“Yes?”

“It’s Aunt Dahlia.”

“Yes, I know. How are you? I was just about to take a shower.”

“Tracy.” Her voice sounded tinny and faraway. I imagined a small light at the end of a dark hallway. A small woman with silver hair and a black dress would sit in a room with that light and call to people who could barely hear her. She looked like my Aunt Dahlia.

“Your parents. They’re . . . Tracy, they passed on.”

She wore a large silver cross and her hands were cold.

“What?”

“Your parents are dead.”

I took a deep breath and scratched my ear. “They . . . that can’t be right.”

“What?” My aunt’s breathing got faster. “Tracy, what?”

“I’m . . . I’m coming home for Christmas.”

“I know you were. You’ve got to come home earlier. This weekend. That’s the funeral. The wake’s tomorrow night, if you can make the first one. Do you want me to call your work number for you?”

I stared at the wall thoughtfully. “I’m supposed to come home for Christmas. “

My aunt was silent, her breath held tense. I heard a rustling. She let out a strangled sigh, like a half-sob.

“It must be a mistake.”

“What?” said  Aunt Dahlia. I heard her sit up straighter. Her voice seemed to float closer.

I laughed. “It’s a mistake! It must be.”

“Tracy, what are you sa—”

“My parents can’t be dead, Aunt Dahlia,” I said kindly. “That’s silly. I’m coming home for Christmas. They weren’t sick. They can’t have both died at once.”

“Tracy, it’s true. They—”

“Good-bye, Aunt Dahlia,” I said. I heard her crying as I pressed the Talk button and set the phone down gently. I wrapped the blanket around my shoulders and turned to sit on the sofa.

Snow was falling, thick and fast, and had already covered the ground. What had once been a dreary, silvery morning sky was now an achingly bright world of white. Black branches twisted and crawled across the sky. I stared at it as the phone began to ring.

“Oh, my God,” I said softly and brought my hands to my face. “My parents are dead.”

The phone kept ringing as my tears froze to my cheeks.
©2008-2009 ~jacklined
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Title = Lame!

The first sentence was sitting in a document for, I don't know, months. I was bored and stuck and started reading old bits and pieces I had saved and I sort just finished it.

I edited this a bit, but nothing is really changed. I feel as though I ought to fix it up more, but it is difficult to know where to start.

This is a short short. No characters need to be fleshed out and nothing needs to be explained. That said, any crits would be most welcome.

Note: My parents are alive and well, though I can identify with her loss. I'm sure most people could.


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Just pimping my girl. I got that lovely preview image from *mylittlejoy. She has more beautiful art, so follow the link. :) Thanks again, Steffy.

Thanks for the favorites and the personal stories; it really makes my story mean so much more.
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EEEEEEEEEEMOOOOOOO! <cough> Sorry.

I can identify with her loss as well. An old friend of mine died in a car crash. Nothing was really the same in the neighbourhood after that. Everything felt out of place and like bits and pieces were missing.

Good short story.

And yes, I WILL update at some point. Jeez.. get off my back :p

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There was a guy in my class that got picked on by almost everyone in the entire school. One night he got an epleptic attack and bit off his tongue own tongue and choked to death. The next day everyone was SO sad and wanted to go to his funeral. Well, they weren't allowed to. They probably would've spit on the casket anyway.

As you already know, I think this is a very good story.

My only tiny nitpick would be at the very end. This is just a personal preference, but I would've probably put just 'They're dead.'

(Glad you put it up :))

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:sniff: great as always... fave!

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Oh wow...that's so sad Jess! I like her state of disbelief, and the idea that they weren't sick, so they couldn't have both died at once...the suddeness of it. I can relate to that. My friend just passed a way, oh my goodness, two weeks ago now. Seems like I just found out yesterday...But I just couldn't believe it, becuase she wasn't sick or anything, and she was so young. This story really hit me. I will say I somewhat agree with Wres though, about the ending it on her admittance/realization that they really are dead. But I like the idea of the aunt trying to call her back constantly...so...maybe the last line would work better as the second to last line. Even as is though, it's still beautiful. I think I'm gonna go cry now...

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While you say you feel you ought to fix this up more, I really like the simplicity of it. It's realistic since there are probably many who would react like that and I think that fleshing it out more might take away from the impact of it. Also, I love the imagery in this piece and I think fleshing it out might take away from that as well. I think it's really nicely done just as it is.

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